about art: is the message clear enough?
At two o'clock in the morning, I am still drowned in fluorescent studio light, my fingers paint-tinged and my eyes coffee-stained red. Sleep murmurs to be from the southern tip of my bed but I ignore it. I am not a runner, a singer, or a musician. Instead, I haphazardly throw acrylics across a canvas in just the right spot, twirling my paintbrush around my chalky thumb. To me, art is not the free GPA boost or the blow-off period you use for homework. It is how I open myself up to the world; it is a way of submerging into an alternate universe where I can control the way that light falls or the way that music should look. Art provides an outlet for self-expression, enabling me to embrace other artists' perspectives and values, learning from them to make myself a better artist and person. Art is not just an elective; it is an emotion. Instead of screaming to the world, I paint. Both turn you inside out.
it's also 19 words too long..
I read your answer and i was pleased. You expressed your love of art well and I like how you mention how art is used as a free period and a gpa booster as I find that it is used that way by many students.
I really liked how you described that "Art is not just an elective; it is an emotion."
Your short answer started out to be interesting until the middle- or the sixth sentence because it seems to get a little to wordy, and I started loosing you. So, if you need to cut back, you could possibly start in the middle- good luck!
coffee-stained red. Sleep murmurs to be
Should it be "Sleep murmurs to me" ?
Coffee-stained, maybe find another discription.
Other than that, good job!!
...fingers tinged by blue paint and my eyes coffee-stained red.
I am not a runner, a singer, or a musician. Instead, I haphazardly throw acrylics across a canvas in just the right spot, twirling my paintbrush around my chalky thumb. ---hahahh nice!! Well, you can be a runner, too, if you get up early tomorrow. :-)
Art is not just an elective; it is a vehicle for emotion.
Good stuff here... above, my ideas are not so important... just ideas I'd like to contribute to your process.
Hey Cindy,
I've already seen what Kevin has suggested, and I see that you still need 19 words to be removed from the essay. I took the time to take out a sentence or two, but I didn't want to rob from the essence of the essay. This is one marvelous essay, by the way. Very well-written, indeed. Take a look at my suggestions:
Talking about a website about artists and creativity on Common App Creative Work?
One of the Common App prompts is to discuss a creative work that you were influenced by. Is it okay to talk about a website as a whole that brings together artists who create things?
Just about any topic you write is ok, so long as it's well-written, interesting and legal.
I hope it is. If the AO reader is stuck in an are prior to the 1992 initiation of societies' Internet experiences, s/he may not be able to appreciate it as much as a discussion of one of the classics. But really... it should be okay.
Do a good, inspired job. Also, you might want to spend some time talking about the various artists represented.
Is the website really a creative work, or just a simple forum?
