My artistic personality will be used to its fullest potential at Boston University. One way would be through theatre
my artistic personality will be used to its fullest through the Boston Theater program (put the actual name of the program or major).
avoid generic statements.
Boston University will allow me to express my artistic abilities
how? as far as i'm concerned, every colleges have theater programs
Because of my enthusiasm for learning,
it's too... cheeky. it sounds too much like you trying to get in college. enthusiasm for learning... it's not bad, but makes you sound a bit pretentious. It's obvious that everyone can say that they are enthusiastic for learning, but only a few actually do. So i'd suggest be more specific. What kind of learning? about the world? in school? languages? cultures? math? what?
Because of my enthusiasm for learning, I would describe myself as receptive. My openness towards new ideas and insights has led me to learn much about the world and its details. I am excited about what knowledge can do, and therefore I try to gain as much information as I can. The receptive manner in which I have will take me far at Boston University. College is meant for learning, and I intend to acquire all the knowledge needed for my future whether it is for my career or for my life-long skills.
this entire paragraph tells nothing about you or BU. honestly, I can duplicate your paragraph and put it in any of my essay. kills the momentum you built so far by mentioning theater, which is actually not an interest that everybody have.
My life is driven by inspiration. For example, I am a juggler; I was inspired to learn after watching a juggling competition on television. Since then juggling has become my passion. Works
you spent 3 sentences to say: One day, I watched TV, and was inspired to be a juggler (this sentnce is not to be used, but you get the idea. be BRIEF!)
ok. typical "i write an essay that shows my strength (vaguely) to make my go in BU, but I didn't actually do any research and don't know anything about BU" type essay.
not to be mean, but you showed 0 reason why BU is the right school for you. If all you know about the school is shown in your essay. I suggest you finding a school you are actually passionate about.
TALK SPECIFICALLY. both in your description of yourself and of the college. what makes you receptive, artistic (that paragraph actually gets the point), and inspiration (really? do you even know what that means?)
you need to be more personal and actually do some thinking and research to answer the prompt.