Aspects of Colorado College which attracted my attention. Why this College?

How did you learn about Colorado College and why do you wish to attend? (500 words)

Physical sciences, particularly physics cosmology, truly excites me. Big questions such as the existence or the fate of the universe have always been my favorite subjects when it came to reading for fun. The first encounter with Colorado College was when I saw a presentation "The Story of Cosmology" by Shane Burns, the professor of physics who teaches at Colorado College's unique program, the Block Plan.

Professor Burns' works are definitely among my favorites. I am always impressed by the elaborate concept and insightful analysis he proposed as it thoughtfully answers the questions I encountered with concrete examples. For instance, in his article "The Physics of Interstellar", I really liked the fact that he used real life examples in explaining the abstract concepts of black hole and multi-dimensions which makes it extremely clear even for those who don't excel in science. Professor Burns has definitely had a huge influence on my passion for physics and my intellectual curiosities even though we never actually met in real life. His work inspired me to pursue my favorite subject even further. i'm really looking forward to take his classes in the Block Plan, especially the "Observational Astronomy" course.

Another aspect of Colorado College that i am excited about is the Block Plan. The term Block Plan was definitely an alien to my eyes but I eventually found out the magic behind it. In highschool, i always found it challenging to do evenly good on all of my courses and not to mention Mongolian education system requires all students to take 15 different courses at a time. The idea "one class at a time" suits me perfectly because my concentration and productivity is at its peak when i'm dealing with only one subject. Shifting my focus frequently can be quite troublesome. Furthermore, taking 15 different assignments, exams and finals from 15 different professors is a nasty, stressful business. At Colorado College, i can peacefully excel in a single course in a few weeks, not worrying too much about the others.

Although there are many more advantages of attending the Colorado College such as the low student faculty ratio and exceptional research opportunities, the Block Plan and Professor Burns are the main reasons i want to attend your institute. I can only find them at Colorado College and my place is with them for the next 4 years.

Batjin, the essay that you developed is well thought out and really displays admirable reasons for wishing to attend Colorado College. In the first paragraph though, you have to add an explanation as to how you came across Prof. Burns and how you managed to see his presentation. I am assuming that you have not been to visit the campus yet, so if you did not have any actual interaction with the professor on campus, how did it happen? Relay the necessary additional information in the first paragraph to better explain the foundation of your response.

In the last paragraph, don't discuss the common known facts such as the faculty and student ration of the college. That is something that tended to weaken your essay. Therefore, it should not be included. The closing statement must close in a position of strength. Therefore, just reiterate the reason for attending at the professor and the academic curriculum. That should work best for your essay.