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'assigned to give a brief speech on choosing Medicine' experience,achievement,risk


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Nov 29, 2011   #1
A few months ago I was assigned to give a brief speech on choosing Medicine as a future career. At first I felt crushed because I disliked Medicine, not because of the sassy behaviors of some doctors that I came across nor because of their abilities to save life, but it was because of my inability to stand the sight of blood. The theme for the show was "fun", then I wondered how I was going to have fun doing what I hated. Although I knew I had no imagination I just had to try in order to make an impact in the lives of younger students and my peers with my knowledge. Gosh! How I wished she had asked me to speak on choosing Engineering as a career that was all I could think of because my love for Engineering was greater than my hatred for Medicine.

Days went by and yet I couldn't bring myself to write a thing or two on the topic I was given, and when it was time for rehearsals, I would make up excuses such as being unavailable and if possibly sick. II couldn't keep up with this deception because I was bound to be caught soon. So I decided to have a chat with the student that was assigned to speak on Engineering. The chat led to me pleading with him to swap his topic with me but all my efforts to no avail because he bluntly refused. I didn't give up, I kept on pestering him to change his mind but instead of making things better it got worse.

Few days later, my teacher discovered what I had done and wasn't too pleased with it. She told me that she gave me the topic not because she knew I wasn't going to be able to pull it through, but because she believed in me and knew that I had the ability in me to do anything once I put my mind to it and was so sure that I wasn't going to let her down. I didn't know which was worse being confused or being brain fused. I just couldn't think of what to write all I thought all day was not letting my teacher down because my mum always told me never to let the people who solely believe in you down.

Two days to go and yet still nothing,words that were like buzzing sounds in my head. It got so bad to the extent that some students in my school started placing bets on me not showing up on the day of the show. In my state of confusion I met someone who I actually didn't know attended the same school with me until that faithful day. Her first words were "you proud arrogant girl who always sees people who aren't your friends indifferently and got whatever she needed when she needed it. Looks like your little trick aren't working anymore." On hearing this I became speechless and then she spoke again in a soft tone that caught me off-guard because that wasn't what I was expecting her to say. She said "at a point in our lives we are faced with situations we have no clue of handling and instead of facing it we run away from it thinking its the best way but yet again the worse because it will always catch up with us sooner or later.

I finally got the inspiration I needed to write my speech from an unexpected source. There were quite a number of people who came for the show including some students who were anxious to hear me fumble while speaking. Surprisingly to them when I spoke they were out of words to say. They were so shocked to the point that they could not believe that I was the one speaking, and at the end of it all, I was awarded the best speaker of the night. My experience changed my view towards people and helped my intellectual growth. Initially I was seen as the rude and arrogant girl but now I am seen as the opposite of all that. I will say that my risk taking experience was worth it if I hadn't done that I would have brought out the best in me and I also wouldn't have changed my attitude towards people.
pepsicola 2 / 13  
Nov 29, 2011   #2
..show ended tremendously well than I had expected..

...well, better than I had expected...

preharps the organizers of the show should not have being too quick the judge the turn out of the show without it being put into action.

perhaps ...should not have been so quick to judge....

it sounds better to say "A few months ago," for the opening of the second paragraph

She also said creating an imagination in our minds will enable students write a great speech.

consider rewriting this sentence

in order to impact my knowledge into the lives of younger students and my peers.

...in order to make an impact in the lives of younger students and my peers with my knowledge.

I knew I couldn't keep up with this deception because I knew I was bound to be caught soon.

the second "I knew" is not necessary

these are just a few suggestions
...you might want to look over your essay again. there are mistakes throughout. it really takes away from the overall meaning of your essay.


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