Unanswered [1] | Urgent [0]
  

Home / Undergraduate   % width Posts: 3


"Attention Seniors!" - Duke University Supplement: Why Duke?


muznaa23 4 / 15  
Dec 30, 2011   #1
Hi! this is my duke supplement. If you help me i will definitely return the favor!

If you are applying to Trinity College of Arts and Sciences, please discuss why you consider Duke a good match for you. Is there something in particular at Duke that attracts you? Please limit your response to one or two paragraphs.

"Attention Seniors! A Duke University representative is in the lyceum. The session will start in 10 minutes," the intercom blared over my head. It was a good opportunity to skip class I thought to myself as I packed my things up and told my teacher I was interested in going to the presentation. When I first heard about Duke University I barely gave it a second thought. It was too far from my home in California and it was located in some random city in North Carolina where it would be too cold for me; it wasn't an option. Before drafting my list of schools to apply to, I spent a great deal of time deciding my major simply because I couldn't pick just one. Throughout high school there were just so many things I wanted to learn and I anticipated a chance to learn everything-I was greedy for knowledge. Politics, economics, law, sociology, psychology, and philosophy were just some of the many things I intended to explore at college. However, no school truly gave me the opportunity to try everything I wanted to, there were too many limitations everywhere. After listening to what the admissions representative had to say my perspective on Duke University completely shifted: I had finally found my dream school. During my research for schools I looked for a place where I could design my own education without boundaries and study what I feel is important. The encouragement of originality and the intensity of intellectual freedom at Duke gives me just that: an opportunity to quench my thirst for knowledge. The freshman curriculum based on the six Modes of Inquiry allows students a focused yet unique program that will cater to their personal and professional needs. After all, global warming cannot be solved by simply learning chemistry or physics; it is a combination of public policy and international relations as well many other disciplines.

With its low faculty-to-student ratio, Duke will give students like me a chance for hands on learning and teamwork: where learning happens beyond the classroom. A chat with a professor would be just as enlightening as attending a lecture. Apart from the academics, I also want to avail the DukeEngage program to help foster my education beyond the four walls of a classroom. To me, this program is an opportunity for students to implement what they have learned and explore further what they have imagined. Dukes advocacy of education beyond a lecture hall is among the reasons why this school attracts me. For a person like me, hands-on learning is the key to success. Personally, I need to experience something for myself before I truly understand it. For me, learning economics is more than just studying causes and effects, its about a global community and learning about that requires more than a textbook. At the Trinity College of Arts and Sciences, where the only freshman requirement is a Writing 20 course and First-year seminar, I'll be able to mold myself a curriculum that keeps me satiated and captivated for the next four years.
rockbiter 1 / 16  
Dec 30, 2011   #2
Solid! I think I just added 3 commas and an apostrophe so keep an eye out for that (in red). But, terrific essay; great job!
Mazinator 1 / 6  
Dec 30, 2011   #3
Muzna, I am also applying to Duke. The prompt asks for a limit of 1-2 paragraphs suggesting they may not want too much to read. So you have some room to take stuff out.

I spent a great deal of time deciding my major simply because I couldn't pick just one. Throughout high school there were just so many things I wanted to learn and I anticipated a chance to learn everything-I was greedy for knowledge. Politics, economics, law, sociology, psychology, and philosophy were just some of the many things I intended to explore at college.

A good rounded student is good but you NEVER want to come across as someone who has no clue what they want or doesnt have some clear path in perspective. You can take alot of that out and focus on 1 or a few things you are really interested in pursuing. Believe me it makes a difference.

After all, global warming cannot be solved by simply learning chemistry or physics; it is a combination of public policy and international relations as well many other disciplines.

Completely take out global warming. As a top notch student you should know that global warming is in very high debate and many people dismiss its validity. Duke surely expects us to know that its in debate. I would toss it out completely.

Praying to get in as well, hope to see you there inshallah ;)

Good essay, go back and focus it. Dont jumble around to much, focus and expand on the main points you want to get across, those reasons why duke is right for you. GOOD LUUUUUUCK !


Home / Undergraduate / "Attention Seniors!" - Duke University Supplement: Why Duke?
Writing
Editing Help?
Fill in one of the forms below to get professional help with your assignments:

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Best Essay Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳