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Attributed to William Hastie, Amherst Class of 1925, the first African-American to serve as a judge.


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Dec 12, 2020   #1

The greater the obstacle, the more glory in overcoming it



ยท Prompt 4: "Difficulty need not foreshadow despair or defeat. Rather achievement can be all the more satisfying because of obstacles surmounted."
Attributed to William Hastie, Amherst Class of 1925, the first African-American to serve as a judge for the United States Court of Appeals

All paths to success and ambition are filled with obstacles. No matter how small the goal is, the way leading to it is filled with obstacles, some small, and some humongous. It is a man's determination and dedication to achieve his goal that fuels his mind, body, and soul to overcome these obstacles and keep moving towards his goal.

Ever since my childhood, I have been interested in politics, both national and international, and curious about the issues our world is facing. When I joined high school, I was exposed to activities such as MUNs and debates. However, the biggest obstacle in my path to becoming a successful debater and MUN delegate was my speech impediment, which caused me to stutter.

I didn't allow this to deter me, and I did my first MUN in class 9. It went better than I had expected, and it gave a huge boost to my morale. I started doing more MUNs and debates, and by the time I reached class 12, I was made the school's co-curricular captain, and I was the school's most experienced MUNer. I feel pride in being a successful member of various MUN circuits all over the country because I overcame a huge roadblock on my path to realising this dream of mine.

In the words of the French playwright Moliere, "The greater the obstacle, the more glory in overcoming it. "Overcoming obstacles is what gives the person a great sense of achievement and content. One must persevere through hardships in order to realize one's dreams. Even if a person is unable to achieve his goals, he is able to calm his conscience by putting in his level best effort to overcome the obstacles. Often, the effort gives the person a greater sense of accomplishment than the goal.
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Dec 13, 2020   #2
This is not an impressive essay response. The situation you presented, the stuttering in relation to your participation in the MUN does not represent a true obstacle that you had to overcome in order to achieve something of importance or greatness, on a limited scale. The fact that you also quoted Moliere at the end further weakened the presentation.You need to understand that a speech impediment, through an obstacle to overcome, is not related to your interest in politics. Rather, a presentation of running for student government, and the obstacles you had to overcome to get elected, would have been more in line with your course of interest and relevant discussion presentation. I would not proceed with using this representation if I were you. It is too simple and forgettable in content.


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