Hey, I did not get the impression you were bragging. I just was not sure you"hit the bat" with this example. The prompt asked for "a personal habit and how does it help define you
Your first sentence starting with baseball did not really answer the "habit" question.
Baseball is something that is very important to me, and I am always looking for ways to get better.
How about getting straight to the point with the habit you mention only at the very end: practicing batting early every morning.
And then go back to how your passion for baseball defines who you are. It would help the reader to learn about what you have achieved from this habit (what "success in baseball?") - this wouldn't be considered bragging, just stating the facts. [
Why is "getting better"
important to you? How were you "rewarded
because I feel rewarded when I have gotten better, even if only by a little bit.
All the stuff in the middle (what I consider narration) will then have a context and prioritized in order of importance. Suggest you establish the framework establishing the habit and importance of baseball, the fill in the rest of the "good habits" you cultivated as a result of passion for the sport (eg. saving money, waking up early, sacrificing sleep, making time for practice.) BTW - these are aspects that all athletes have to incorporate in their life if they want to make time for their sport of choice. Think of what makes you different?