Sharing you're attained knowledge
sharing
your attained knowledge
Simple spelling mistakes will mar your chances so take care.
a variety of social influence
You cannot contribute with social influence, you can contribute with social perspectives. Influence is an active verb, you cannot contribute it.
Attending one the most multicultural high schools in New Jersey
attending one
of the most...
I have learned that having such a variety of backgrounds can do nothing more but help you
I have learned that such a wide variety of backgrounds can do nothing but help you.
I will learn to value others differences
others'
Rutgers University came was my answer
Rutgers University was my answer to all...
On the whole a well written essay.