The Beatles song "Money Can't Buy Me Love" inundated my ears upon my birth.

We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (*)(100 words or fewer)

I was brought into this world with the sound of music, since one of the nurses forgot to turn off her phone off and so The Beatles song "Money Can't Buy Me Love" inundated my ears upon my birth. Music has played a huge role in my life from the nights in which I stayed up with my arms slung over a guitar or my fingers dancing over the keys of the piano, to the conversation starters about the best band of all time or best guitar names. Music has taken over the lives of many, but it shaped mine.

I was brought into this world with the sound of music, since one of the nurses forgot to turn off her phone (extra 'off' here removed) and so The Beatles song "Money Can't Buy Me Love" inundated my ears upon my birth. Music has played a huge role in my life from the nights in which I stayed up with my arms slung over a guitar or my fingers dancing over the keys of a piano, to the conversation starters about the best band of all time or best guitar names. Music has taken over the lives of many, but it shaped mine.

I feel your essay is pretty good but you are simply focusing on how music has shaped you. Perhaps a few specifics on your experiences in music would be a better highlight. Also remember that many students write about dance/music as what they do for pleasure so your essay must stand out among so many similar ones. I found little uniqueness and specificity in this essay which could make you stand out.

Please read and review my prompt also. Thank you.