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addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectivs you hope
I always ask myself what I can learn from life, and the response that I always receive is experience. Experiences are the foundation which allows me to grow, live, and survive in an all too changing, chaotic, fallible world. At times these experiences can fill the human body with feeling of achievement, satisfaction, and even suffering. Personally, I feel that experiences which content the soul are the most worthwhile of my many personal adventures in life. I think if I can study in Stony Brook University that will be a good experience in my life.
My dream is to become a business woman. However, at present the international economical situation is very difficult. The economic crisis is hanging over lots of countries. Personally, I feel during this hard time each country should work in concert and tide over the difficulties together. That's a big reason why I choose Stony Brook. I know at Stony Brook students from all 50 states and 110 foreign countries. That allows me earlier know how to work with diffident country people, indeed know diffident country's' culture, that's good for my future life. Furthermore, Stony Brook has many experienced professors and professional academic environment. These will allows me receive more knowledge.
The color of Stony Brook is red; I do believe if I can study in Stony Brook will made me become a person who is full of passion, zeal and enthusiasm.