^The first sentence is not required.
In regards to the second sentence, what makes the school 'prestigious' with an 'excellent' program. Flattery is cool, but can be fairly unconvincing as well.
The third sentence is..meh?
I quickly got involved in volunteering locally at INOVA Fairfax hospital to get experience first hand. The endless joy brought to ill patients after the men and women in white lab coats had healed their physical and mental wounds, was truly an incredible experience.
^This is a personal experience, but I fail to see how this relates to the essay prompt which is asking you why you are choosing VCU.
I didn't know specifically what field I wanted to pursue, until a close relative of mine had his life saved by a triple gastric bypass surgery....
^This chunk also fails to specify the reasons why you have chosen VCU.
It would seem that from this essay prompt, you are not required to narrate a story or a personal experience as much as you are to discuss why you want to study at VCU and why you feel that is a college that suits you.