Hi I would love it if you checked for grammer and content-related errors; I also would love it if you checked to see if I have a contrete message and a structure.
Prompt: What do you value about the Human Ecology perspective and mission as you consider your goals and dreams? Reflect on our majors as you respond.
As I consider my goals and dreams, I greatly value the mission of the College of Human Ecology. Ever since I was little, I realized that I had always wanted to be a doctor. I value the mission of the College of Human Ecology in that its goal is to apply practical solutions to health-related challenges faced by people not only in New York, but also across the world. In accordance with the College of Human Ecology's vision, I wish to solve health-related problems through a practical and holistical method - to improve nutrition and health by considering not only the biological and physical aspects of health, but also the social, economic, and political ones.
My intended major at the College of Human Ecology is Human Biology, Health & Society. I desire to pursue the certain major because I believe that in today's society much emphasis has been placed on improving health conditions around the world by considering the biological and physical aspects of health but limited attention has been focused on the social, economical, cultural, and political areas. I believe that the College of Human Ecology will help my goals of being a physical and enriching the human development altogether. After reading the introduction of that particular major, I knew that the major was right for me because the major's goal is to view human health issues from a broad and a diverse perspective. Obtaining medical-related education from a broad and a diverse perspective would help me in solving health-related problems through a practical and a holistical method by allowing my to approach those challenges eclectically.
By being accepted into the College of Human Ecology, I would have the option to explore my career options that is related to Human Biology, Health & Society. I currently have a strong desire to become a doctor, but I have the option to consider different career interests while still obtaining a multidisciplinary education in the health system. I know that Human Biology, Health & Sciences is a great starting point for pre-medical education because it has a great curriculum in which I can take many of the courses required for medical school admission while learning about the biological and social aspects of health. I, therefore, can receive pre-medical education while learning about the aspects of health that get limited attention and therefore learn how to solve health problems more effectively by improving nutrition and health and enriching the human development.
I know, that with the complexities of many health issues and the advancement of design and technology in an attempt to meet the challenges of the health issues, the responsibilities of health professionals have increased rapidly. I wish to enter the College of Human Ecology because I know that I will receive education that prepare me to take on those responsibilities and face the health-related challenges of the 21th world.
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Please see my comments on your other essays in regards to mechanical corrections. Avoid using abbreviations and symbols in academic writing; always write out the word or words the symbol stands for.
In regards to content, what is the "21th world?"
The organization of this piece is good, both in regards to sentence structure and overall organization and flow. It seems to answer the prompt adequately.
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