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(becoming an inventor / Walking into Tahrir) - MIT Transfer Essays 1 and 3


mbanani 8 / 26  
Feb 8, 2012   #1
1. Provide your reasons for wanting to attend MIT (250 words)

As a child, I dreamed of growing up to become an inventor. As I grew older, I discovered that invention was actually research and development and that the best place to do that was MIT. During middle and high school, I developed many interests and excelled in all the subjects related to them. These interests included aeronautics, robotics, artificial intelligence, cognitive science and pure math. Although I am currently studying mechanical engineering (which covers aeronautics and robotics), I would still like to explore these other fields. MIT offers very strong programs in all these fields and considering the interdisciplinary courses and projects, I believe that I can find my true passion at MIT.

MIT's research programs are known worldwide and its discoveries and inventions have truly changed the world. As a student who's interested in R&D, I believe that there's no place better for me than MIT. MIT offers courses, like 2.009, that allow me to design and build new machines. There are even clubs like MITERS where I could just go and invent whatever I can imagine, or I can take it to the next level and join cutting-edge research through the UROP. I dream to join a project like 6th sense in Media Lab where I would be realizing a fictional object. I want to go to MIT because I believe that only there would I be able to fulfill my potential and realize my dream.

3.B. Tell us about the most interesting experience you've ever had. (500 words)

this essay, I only wrote 380 words, im kinda stuck and dont know what exactly to say and i feel that i drifted away from the actual question. Can u please tell me what u think of the essay and suggest what i should change or add ?

The most interesting experience that I can recall having was walking into Tahrir on the 15th of February 2011. I went to Tahrir a lot of times before the 11th of February and first joined the protests on the 28th of January, "Friday of anger". On the 15th, the people were happy, ecstatic that the revolution has succeeded. The elderly were praising the youth for making the revolution succeed and everyone was optimistic about the bright future that awaited Egypt. Citizens united to clean after the revolution, to rebuild whatever was destroyed and everyone did it with a smile on their faces. People treated each other with respect and kindness, and all the sectors of the people were working together in harmony. Tahrir on that day resembled a utopian view of Egypt. Since I was young, I rarely saw Egyptians smiling in the street, this was understandable considering the number of social ills that existed as well as the extremely tough life conditions that they had to go through, but after the 11th of February, everyone believed that those days were the past and they were ready to build a bright new future. Since that point, I was determined to build that future, now it was in my hand and I became the master of my destiny. I've been pessimistic in the past about the future of the field of research and development in Egypt, but now I believed that this could change, and I decided to make sure I was ready when Egyptian research became a reality.

During the past few months, a lot have changed. The military rule is being opposed by a majority of Egyptians especially after the past acts of violence in Port Said and the crime spree that went through Egypt. I am still optimistic about the future as I maintain my belief that the higher the value of something, the harder you have to fight for it. And regardless of how bad things can get, I will always keep that view of Tahrir on the 15th of February in my mind, that there's a possibility of a better Egypt. When I first walked into Tahrir square that day, I saw a glimpse of what Egypt could be and I intend to make it real.
EF_Susan - / 2,364 12  
Feb 13, 2012   #2
The second essay is interesting, but it sure does not seem to answer the prompt. The most interesting thing you've done is walk into a town with a vision of the future? I mean it is very interesting, but you should make it more personal. You gave what sounded more like a history lesson than a personal experience. This should be easy to fix, for example, did you have ancestors from there? Could you feel them as you walked, imagining what they would think of the situation? :)


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