The benefits of a diverse educational community are endless. A diverse educational community brings different people, cultures, languages, and more. As I begin my journey at Virginia Tech, I will come in contact with people that are not only from a different country, but also people with disabilities, people with different economical statuses, and people with different preferences of sexual orientation. I will not only learn to communicate with different types of people, but also learn to accept individuals for who they are and respect their morals and beliefs. By doing so, I will be able to take the knowledge I learn from them and carry it with me as I enter the work force. I am prepared to accept this challenge as I continue my college career. I believe that Virginia Tech will be a perfect fit to not only study from a rigorous curriculum, but also gain a better knowledge of the types of people the world holds.
I am not sure what else to write. I don't want to sound generic, but I'm having a difficult time coming up with ideas for this topic. Also, it has to be 250 words or less.
Okay, your ideas are sound and there is nothing wrong with sounding generic here if you can make your essay sound sincere and genuine...i feel as though u style of writing and the words u have used don't do this properly...For instance, you are simply stating that going to Virginia tech would make u this and that. I don't mean to sound harsh but i don't think anyone who read your essay would truly believe that u were very enthusiastic about experiencing a diverse community...I suggest you make your essay more real, sincere and heartfelt....post ur future drafts here if you want further revison...once again i am sorry and u don't have to take my advice if u don't like my suggestions...GOOD LUCK
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Hi, I agree with maroon5. I don't really feel as if you truly want to experience a diverse community. Your essay sounds a bit emotionally detached. I think that you should make it more personal. Really concentrate on what you truly feel and show the depth of your emotions. That will really make it a more heartfelt essay. Don't wanna sound too harsh but your essay sounds as if you are merely stating facts. Improve on it and you're sure to have a great essay! Good luck!
Btw, could you pls critic my essay as well? Any kind of criticism is welcomed!