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Besides work, how did you spend your last summer? NYU Transfer short essays


sherry33 1 / -  
Mar 27, 2010   #1
Does anyone have any suggestions or improvements for the answer to the following prompt?

Besides work, how did you spend your last summer? (in 4 lines or less)

Prior to interning in a modernized Shanghai, I spent a few weeks visiting relatives in a familiar, quaint village in rural China. I experienced a vastly different self-sustainable culture where mornings consisted of picking up fresh milk from the local bakery and learning the authentic way to cook Chinese food. In the afternoons, I would help tend to my grandmother's precious vegetable patches, and teach my cousins Basic English.

comet2000 10 / 48  
Mar 28, 2010   #2
Prior to interning in a modernized(i don't think you would need that word.) Shanghai, I spent a few weeks visiting relatives in a familiar , quaint village in rural China. I experienced a vastly different self-sustainable culture where mornings consisted of picking up fresh milk from the local bakery and learning the authentic wayhow to cook Chinese food. In the afternoons , I would help tend to my grandmother's precious vegetable patches, and teach my cousins Bb asic English.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Mar 28, 2010   #3
No comma necessary, no capital B necessary:
...patches and teach my cousins basic English.

This is very, very impressive!! Is there room to write more? At least a conclusion sentence? Can you add a little about your internship?


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