Gum, you forgot to tell us what kind of help you need :-) Do you need help in dealing with the prompt? Expanding the word content? I'm not exactly sure how I can be of help here. Having read the short paragraph you have written has given me some ideas about which sections you could extend though. So maybe giving me a heads up on the word count will help me guide you towards the expansion of your essay? Anyway, here's my take on your essay:
"Tomorrow's a big day." said the director as I arrived at the Pittsburgh headquarters. Tired and weary, I mindlessly went to bed. The next morning, our team was scheduled to meet with refugee children.
- Headquarters of what? Why were you meeting refugee children? What team were you a part of and what was your team tasked to do during the meeting with the children?As a domestic missionary, I was worried; I felt that I would not be able to interact with them because of our different backgrounds.
- As a what? I think you could explain a bit more about what your job is. Also, you need to clarify why you feared not being able to interact with the kids because of different backgrounds."Rose" she said as she flew higher and higher her face brightened with joy.
- Why was she flying higher and higher? What exactly were you doing with the kids?At that moment, I realized how much these children needed us.
- What exactly are the backgrounds of these children? Why do you say that they need your group?As I became more conscious of my influence on them, I was elated. I was able to give them genuine love and care while they found the joy in the smallest of things. When it was time to leave, Rose gave me a hug and said "I can't wait until you come back tomorrow!". Overwhelmed with feelings I began tearing up.
- I think you need to develop a paragraph that explains how this became the best day ever for you (so far). Right now, it just seems like you were babysitting kids in a park.The Dalai Lama once said, "Happiness is not something ready made. It comes from your own actions." From something so small I had gained so much more. My experience with Rose proved that happiness is contagious; and this is why it stands out as my best day ever
- I suggest that you make this your introduction and work your way from there. This is actually the hook that your paper needs to keep the reader glued to the paper. It also helps us understand how the events of the day led to the best day of your life (so far).I hope I was able to help. Once you give more detailed instructions, I will try to give you more detailed advice as well :-)