It is three weeks before the start of your freshman year at BU, and you are talking to your new roommate for the first time. Since you are trying to get to know each other, what are a few things you would want to share about who you are?
Hello roomie! Given the fact that we will be spending lots of time together at BU, I think it is important that I tell you a few things about myself. To start off, I am very energetic person by nature, and you will often find me engaged in random, spur-of-the-moment activities: baking muffins in the middle of the day, inventing crazy dance moves, occasionally even bursting into song. I like to get out and keep myself busy throughout the day, so you probably won't find me in my dorm room too often-if you do, there's a good chance I'm sleeping. I'm pretty much always in a good mood, so if you ever need someone to cheer you up, just look for me!
When all my energy is burnt out, I'm quite the pro at relaxing. One of my favorite hobbies is going to Barnes & Noble and plopping down in a fluffy chair with a good read in one hand and a caramel macchiato in the other. My favorite things to read are periodicals-anything from Time to People to Psychology Today-though I'm also a good fan of the "bestsellers" section. Reading has always been one of my favorite pastimes, and I can recommend some great books to you if you're a literary nut like me. Additionally, I also love sprawling on my couch with a bowl of ice cream and watching English movies. Have you seen An Education or Notes on a Scandal? If you haven't, you absolutely must! They're wonderful movies, and I would love to watch them for a second time with you.
I'd love to tell you more about myself, but I feel that the best way for you to get to know me is by just hanging out with me. So what do you feel like doing? Grabbing coffees at Starbucks? Catching a show at the Boston Playwrights Theatre? Having a cheesy dance party to 80's music? Whatever we do or wherever we go, I'm sure that you'll get a much better sense of my personality. In the meantime, I can't wait to learn more about you!
My first impression is of a brilliantly conceived essay...You paint a very lively,vivid picture of yourself that will definitely set you apart from the other essays that the adcoms will receive...However,having read this essay over a few times,i just get the feeling that your elaboration on the books you read saps the writing of some of its energy( unless ofcourse you attempted a more sedate approach when talking about your relaxing habits...) Just look over the essay one more time and see whether you can improve the tone of the section in anyway...everything else is perfect and there are no grammatical or style errors...awesome work and GOOD LUCK...
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