Hello, I am a transfer student seeking to apply to School of Visual Arts under their BFA Photography and Video program. As a part of their application requirements, I need to submit a 500-word statement of intent. I hope you guys can help me out. Thank you in advance!
application essay
I still remember the first time that I recognized that my consciousness had started. It was my 3rd birthday and I woke up to my then 16-year old sister telling me "happy birthday!" The next thing I know I was grabbing a piece of paper and pencil and it was the start of my life and my love for the arts. Looking back I didn't have a wonderful childhood, I grew up with two older half-sisters that gave me only half of the love they can offer to a young child. But art was able to fulfill the other half that I was denied of. Recognizing that her youngest child back then had interest in art, she would bring home scrap paper from her job for me to draw on. I learned to draw a stick figure before I even knew how to write and for the next 13 years of my life I was the class artist. But as the art form I was partaking on became stagnant in my heart, it yearned for a new flame. It was photography.
Through my tear-soaked memory, I saw my 13-year old self sketching a camera at the back of my journal hoping that one day I'll get to own one. But as the universe played its game, my wish was granted. There, a passion for a new form of art was sparked inside of me. The camera almost never left my side throughout high school.
As years went by, a chance peeked through when it was time for me to enter college. I applied to De La Salle-College of Saint Benilde under the Bachelor of Arts in Multimedia Arts program. I was ecstatic, but my family couldn't afford it. I begged through and through until they agreed to allow me to be a full-time student but on the condition that I'll need to grab a scholarship before I enter my sophomore year. My first semester, I failed a subject, this became a wrench to my goals in life. But instead of backing down, I worked my way out and became a scholar at the start of my sophomore year until I graduated. Finishing my college degree as the official school publication's Photography Editor. During those years, photography became the reason I was able to study as my position in the school publication took the weight off my family's back.
But my struggles didn't end there, as my depression lingered at the back, there are times I wanted to end my life's journey, but I look back to these memories as if they are a photo wall, a still for every chapter of my life that brought me to where I am now. I look back how photography opened up the doors for me to survive and gain myself education through it. With photography, I am given a chance to immortalize these memories and I believe that SVA is the key to me being able to bring these life-stills to the world.Hi,
you seem more emotional in your intent letter, I recommend you to be more realistic about your motives and passion for photography.
thus, try to add sentences about your goals and plans.
Also, it is better to say (I granted education through it.) than ( gain myself education through it)
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Holt Educational Consultant - / 14,801 
4780 A statement of intent needs to prove that you are a qualified candidate for the course you hope to transfer to. Start with the comparison of the two universities and what drove your intention to switch schools. That is not clearly presented in this essay. In fact, it isn't mentioned at all. You have to clarify if you are intending to switch schools and courses or just switch schools. Consider also that your intentions need to be supported by your purpose and goals. Adding some information about your accomplishments as a photographer if you have any. They already know that you want to switch schools and perhaps courses. What they want to know more about are your academic and personal reasons for the move. However, they do not need an emotional explanation for the transfer. What you should be explaining with regards to your personal reasons, should relate to your professional considerations. How do you see yourself as a future photographer? What sort of personal fulfillment will you get if you are able to switch courses and schools? Tie together all of these reasons and you should have a more effective statement of intent.
