'the birth of my creativity' - something you do for pleasure

Hello,

Here's my first admission essay. I really need your help on this.

1. We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do simply for the pleasure of it.

A dusky evening would always witness the birth of my creativity as I sit serenely in my room with a white paper before me to contain my imagination. Using strokes of graphite, I would emulate the shape and shades of my fancy till I had encapsulated the figure my eyes stared at the vacant. And after much toil, when I believed that my sketch was worthy of publishing, I would call out to my editor: 'Mother, what do you think?' Her praise would only add to my individual glory and content. To me, only sketching would render such a joy. (100 words)

I would really appreciate your help on this. THANK YOU VERY MUCH, in advance, FOR YOUR KIND REVIEW.

Seems to answer the prompt directly. Well done.

Thanks..

Anyone else....I really need help on this!!!!

Anyone?

You are a graceful writer. The essay answers the prompt correctly. Here are some minor corrections: sat in the first line
Her praise would only add to my individual glory and content Her praise would encourage me to continue the persuit of my innate creativity: sketching. This will take your word count to 94.

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Agree with MIT2016. It's really good. The flow of writing does take the reader to your place.

Your essay answers the question and has such a nice flow of words :)