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BOOKS!; ESSAY: Favorite word and why?


schoudhry 2 / 2  
Dec 29, 2012   #1
I read Bridge to Terabithia and bawled like a baby. I was seven and supposed to be asleep, but my ardent desire to know what happened between Jess and Leslie led me to hunker down in my comforter with a flashlight in one hand and my beloved book in the other. Since then the flashlight has evolved into a cellphone and I no longer have to hide the book, but my passion for books has remained the same. Through the course of ten years, I have learned many things from the books I've read; Romeo isn't real, there's always a new perspective to any issue, and never mess with a teacher who's a couple of years away from retirement- they could make the rest of your high school anything but peaceful. I've read and reread my favorite books, leaving the harshness of reality and gaining a new insight or perspective each time I crack open a book. Ernest Hemingway once said: "There is no friend as loyal as a book." Being the oldest child in the family, I had no older sibling to turn to for advice; so naturally I turned to books. These books have pushed me to pursue my dreams, go for things I didn't think were possible, and to stop putting myself down. Certain books showed me how much I loved to help others, and how important it was for me to pursue my passion- because of that, I am now the first student employee at NOVA Pediatrics becoming one step closer to my dreams of being a pediatric surgeon. Hearing the word 'book' from someone, except my teachers, brightens my day. Others perceive books as burdensome and obligatory while I perceive books as my older sibling, helping me voice my opinions, pushing me to do my best, and never sugar coating anything for me. I suppose Hemingway was correct, books are the ultimate best friend.
shiverrrrs 2 / 4  
Dec 29, 2012   #2
Overall, I love this essay, as a fellow book-lover, it really shows your passion, and it's well-worded. Good job!

I love the books as your older sibling part - it's different.

I wouldn't say the "except my teachers" part. Why? Do you not like the classics and books you read in class? Maybe going with that idea, you could say except when the word "text" comes in front of it.

"Certain books showed me how much I loved to help others, and how important it was for me to pursue my passion- because of that, I am now the first student employee at NOVA Pediatrics becoming one step closer to my dreams of being a pediatric surgeon"

I think you need to be more specific about how the books encouraged you to pursue your passion. I get what you are trying to do (a little bragging about yourself is always a good thing in these essays), but you need to connect it more to books, or it seems like you just threw it in there for brownie points.

The last line is nice, maybe a little cliche though.

You are a fantastic writer, so take or leave my criticisms, it's your essay. I hope this helps!


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