How does the University of Chicago, as you know it now, satisfy your desire for a particular kind of learning, community, and future? Please address with some specificity your own wishes and how they relate to UChicago.
I don't know what I want to do when I grow up. All I know is that I'm going to do something I love. Getting a high salary would be a nice plus, but if that means not enjoying myself, then no thank you. When I entered high school, I realized that the prospect of an actual job was on the horizon. After college, I don't want to pretend to love the next part of my life. I want to be happy.
The University of Chicago is the college that comes to mind when I think of happiness. It makes me dream of spending the next four years of my life with an amiable family that consists of not only the students, but also the experienced faculty. There's an amazing 7 to 1 student to faculty ratio, so I know I can get the personal down to earth kind of tips (advice? Information?) that students from other schools won't receive. With over 350 student organizations and an office of Career Advancement, this school - no, this home - will provide me with the strong, firm foundation I need.
I can see myself informing the other 16 students in my class to take part in donating blood to the American Red Cross Club right before dashing to the Grand Reading Room to study for the psychology exam that I aim to crush. When the day comes to an end, I'll be sitting on the porch of my dorm enjoying a novel under the breathtakingly vintage architecture in the resplendent Hyde Park.
Whether it be beat boxing with the Voices in my Head, jamming with the Phinix Dance Crew, or doing cardio in the Bernard J. DelGiorno Fitness Center, I know that I'll never be bored in this diversely wonderful community. I will constantly be learning something with every step of the way.
It's this kind of life that makes me happy. It's with that kind of happiness that gives me an identity. And it's with that kind of identity that shows me that I belong in the University of Chicago.
(In the bold, I don't know whether to use the word "tips" "advice" or "information")
When I say "this home", I feel that I may be sucking up a bit too much.
"Bernard J. DelGiorno Fitness Center" I feel that the term is just too wordy. LOL Maybe UChicago students refer to it as something shorter?
Insights please! Thank you!!(:
I think that this overall a great essay, personally I would leave in the calling UChicago "this home" but that it just me. One part I might consider revising is the very last line the wording seems rather awkward to me, but overall a good paper that certainly shows your passion for attending UChicago.
