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Boston University-Me in 3 words


danielhe 4 / 13  
Dec 24, 2009   #1
So the topic is: In an essay of no more than 500 words, please select three words that describe you best and tell us how you will use these qualities/characteristics to contribute fully to the BU community.

Any constructive comments will be highly appreciated and thanks in advance

Being asked to pick only three words to describe the type of person I am is a very belaboring task. Ever since I was able to speak and understand other people, my parents have raised me to be a good person. They have been able to make a person that is hardworking, responsible and polite.

As the first born, my parents pushed me to excel and achieve my potential. I went through countless numbers of worksheets in elementary school in addition to the school homework. My parents assigned me workbooks during the summer to keep me busy. I remember those hot, sweaty days frantically trying to work through what my parents had assigned to me. Without my parent's persistence, I would not have become the hard worker I am. Even though they no longer have to watch me, I have retained a hard working character. With everything that I do, I try my best with what I have to achieve the best results.

Along with being a hardworking person, I believe myself to be a responsible person. To be a hard worker, I must also be responsible. I will not be able to get much stuff done if I do not hold myself responsible for my action, or lack of action. School takes up much of the time during the year. In order to excel in academics, I do my best to organize my time for maximum efficiency. This includes not leaving everything to the last minute. Organization of time allows more time for me to then do activities that I like, for example playing basketball with my friends. Being a responsible person also means taking responsibility for the things that go wrong. A person that can not take responsibility for his or her actions is neither dependable nor responsible.

Politeness, a quality often times underestimated in value, is another characteristic that my parents instilled in me. Although my politeness leads many to see me as quiet, I am only trying to give respect to my peers and elders that they deserve. Everyday I see the younger generation's respect decreasing, and without politeness, they lose a valuable asset.

These three qualities and characteristics are the ones that I feel best describe the person I am. They may only be three, but they will help me contribute to the Boston University community. I will pursue excellence in my schooling and serve the local community in my stay. These qualities will help me portray the excellence at Boston University to the rest of the world.
autumnwave 11 / 35  
Dec 25, 2009   #2
I understand what you wrote. Reading your essay, I also think you're polite, responsible and hard-working.
I'm not good at English to help you. But I think you should tell some story to illustrate your idea if you want your essay is more interesting.

Have a good time!
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Dec 27, 2009   #3
Being asked to pick only three words to describe the type of person I am is a very belaboring task. This sentence does not help anything.

Ever since I was able to speak and understand other people, my parents have raised me to be a good person . Let's say something more specific...

They have been able to make a person that is hardworking, responsible and polite.---> yes, these are specific, but they become general altogether. Maybe it is better to focus on one. My parents were eccentric about their shared belief that they could mold me into a good person if they worked me half to death. Then, continue:

Because I was the first born, my parents pushed me to excel and achieve my potential. I went through countless numbers of worksheets in elementary school in addition to the school homework. My parents assigned me workbooks during the summer to keep me busy. I remember those hot, sweaty days frantically trying to work through what my...----> this is where it starts to get very good! You are drawing the reader into your world.
SP10 1 / 8  
Dec 27, 2009   #4
I am only trying to give the respect to my peers and elders that they deserve.

Organization of time allows me to then persue activities that I like, for example playing basketball with my friends.

Hi!....corrections are in red.

Hope they help!
OP danielhe 4 / 13  
Dec 28, 2009   #5
Thank you guys so much!!


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