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Brain and Cognitive Sciences at MIT- why major?


quanny 9 / 36 2  
Dec 28, 2013   #1
Although you may not yet know what you want to major in, which department or program at MIT appeals to you and why? (*) (100 words or fewer)

I want to attend Brain and Cognitive Sciences at MIT because it allows me to know more about myself and relate to people. I've been following MIT OpenCourseWare and one of my favorite daily jog companions is Prof. Jeremy Wolfe's Introduction to Psychology. My synapses get fired up by his humorous teaching and I hope to learn brain's mechanics in greater depth. When I read that MIT researchers developed drugs to strengthen synapses to help people improve memory, I could already envision myself in this innovative and research-friendly community, generating and sharing knowledge for better minds with the brightest minds.
Kristoria 3 / 51 1  
Dec 28, 2013   #2
I also liked this essay because it was specific to the school and you showed that you really have an interest in MIT through your examples.
plee24 3 / 21 8  
Dec 29, 2013   #3
...I hope to learn brain's mechanics in greater depth...

Other than that, I like your response! You included a great example that really shows your passion for neuroscience.
OP quanny 9 / 36 2  
Dec 29, 2013   #4
thx! what's wrong with this sentence?
plee24 3 / 21 8  
Dec 29, 2013   #5
In the italics, you can see that I've struckthrough the apostrophe s. The final sentence should include "brain mechanics," not "brain's mechanics".
OP quanny 9 / 36 2  
Dec 30, 2013   #6
oh haha sorry i didn't see that! Thank you so much >.<
plee24 3 / 21 8  
Dec 30, 2013   #7
No problem at all! Good luck with the rest of your application(s)!
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Dec 30, 2013   #8
I want to attend Brain and Cognitive Sciences at MIT because it allows me to know more about myself and relate to people.

I wish to major in Brain and Cognitive Sciences at MIT because it allows me to understand myself better and relate to other people well.

In the italics, you can see that I've struckthrough the apostrophe s. The final sentence should include "brain mechanics," not "brain's mechanics".

Good notice and advice by plee24 :)
I too find this pretty good.... It's a short and sweet response :D ... Wish you good luck with your application :)
OP quanny 9 / 36 2  
Dec 30, 2013   #9
thank you so much for your helpful edits!


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