`Among the many dramas that I have watched, a medical drama called, "Brain" was the most intriguing to me. "Brain" draws from the daily lives of neurosurgeons and how they treat patients. I started to develop an interest in neurology after watching this series, and have been seeking opportunities to observe and study the real lives of neurosurgeons ever since. In summer of 2009, I received my first opportunity to learn about neurosurgeons: The Korea University Hospital offered me a volunteer opportunity in the department of neurosurgery. I did not only learn many valuable lessons but also developed a strong sense of service through this experience.
On the first day of my volunteer, the doctor lectured us about the complex structure of our brain. There are more parts of the brain that perform specific functions for the body than I thought. The one part that was most fascinating to me is called the limbic system. The Limbic system is a set of brain structures that support a variety of functions including emotion, behavior, and memory. Limbic system supports a capacity of sharing a deep emotion between human nonverbally, called limbic resonance. According to General Theory of Love, Limbic resonance is an essential capability for human to form a basis of social connection and feeling of empathy. Success of consulting between doctors and patients occurs knowledge, technical skill of doctor and nature of social relationship that exists between doctors and patients. Thus, understanding and bonding with a patient is really important in therapy to develop a trust so they fully cooperate with the doctors. During my volunteer activity, Patients always greeted with a smile and said thank you for helping us. I became friendlier with them and started to hear their issues, concerns and life stories. At the end of my volunteer activity program, patients did not want to let me go. I feel like I am involved in the community and socially connected with people.
In the television drama, "Brain," the neurosurgeons are portrayed as having prestige, reputation, and respect. However, a neurosurgeon's real life is very different from the way life is in a drama. Doctors often skip meals because they are so busy- they have to make their routines twice a day to see the condition of their patients and perform a surgery for over 10 hours. Doctors sacrifice their own health for their patients. I respect their strong sense of service. By being involved in SWAT (Students Working against Tobacco) for two years, I have developed a dedication and commitment to my community. Underage smoking is a huge issue in this nation I have contributed my time through both speech-giving and handing out flyers in order to persuade and inform parents and policy makers about tobacco packaging and how it influences early-age smoking. When I take a long time to prepare for my speeches, I know I am sacrificing for the prevention of child smoking and the improvement of public health, I enjoy improving others' health condition just like a doctor would.
March to the World by Han-bi Ya portrays a famous ophthalmologist in a small town in Kenya who was curing patients who had an endemic and infectious disease. "You are a well-known doctor, why are you working in this small town that no one even knows?" Han-bi Ya asked him. He responded that "It is too wasteful if I use my skill and talent to make money and gain fame; more than everything else, this job is what motivates me." This figure inspired me to find a job that I can really enjoy for my entire life, irrespective of monetary concerns. This means having a job that allows me to help people and make a significant impact within my community.
I am thinking about deleting the whole third paragraph.
please help!
and i need some support on 2nd paragraph( where i talk about limbic system)
Thank YOu!
For the second paragraph I think it would help if you took out the definitions and such and made it more about your experiences volunteering. More personal growth and how it was different from the drama, but why you still liked it. And for the third paragraph it seems to get a little off topic, but I think you can still connect SWAT with the other experiences. But if you want to take it out I think you need to elaborate more on your experience instead. But you have a good conclusion and the comparison to the drama was interesting :)
