This is a very well written essay. It answers the prompt, and it is fairly unique to Brandeis. There's just a couple of issues.
Bacon once said
Can you include the first name as well? Bacon is a very popular pork product, and while I know it's the name of some philosopher I just got distracted.
Boththe Song Dynasty in 11 A.D and the P.R.C in 1960' s
protection of their economy
I am so ambitious that I want to figure out the connection between the past and the present of the entire world, especially the four great ancient civilizations in particular .
I want to know why
Fortunately, I found Brandeis
the Middle East (capitalize)
Brandeis is like the
amicable elder who raises
her children beside the vivid but historical city of Boston (I thought Brandeis is in the Middle East?)
I hope I will
have the honor to name
Brandeis as my alma mater and use what Brandeis offered me to make
we are making better.
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