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'My brother's decision' - With independence comes increased responsibility


biggdog523 1 / 2  
Feb 12, 2012   #1
The saying "with independence comes increased responsibility" is not only a sentence, but it is also a fact. From the day a child is born, its independence is not present. But it is only when the child grows up and moves out that the independence is felt, and therefefore its responsiblity increased. The responsibility felt on a person grows with their independence, personal care and descion making all impact ones responsiblity and independence.

Caring for yourself is a result of personal independence. Infact, when I was young my mother had always told me to zip up and put a jacket on before I went outside, my mother had the responsibility of caring for me. Now as a comparison due to my age, my mom does not even mention these things, instead it is my responsibility to zip up. The result of my independence was viewed as increased responsibility. Moreover, my mother chooses not to cook for me, she expects me to cook a nutritious meal for myself. Lastly, my mom has not even told me to bathe in ages, she expects that it is my responsibility to know when to wash up. In summary, my mother served as a prime example as a showcase of my responsibility due to my growth and independence.

The descion that my brother made to move out of the house was due to his independence. To illustrate, he now has the responsibility to make descions on his own, for example he has to decide on what food to get from the supermarket. As a matter of fact, he also has to decide on managing his finances. Futhermore, he has the job on managing a schedule, he may pick work over a family visit. Obviously, this is a consequence of his independence.

Personal care and descion making are viewed as the pinnacle of responsibility. With independence comes responsibility, his statement is proved in everyday life, in the past, present and he future.

YangTeng 4 / 6  
Feb 12, 2012   #2
At young ages, we as children were taken care fully of by our parents, we became our parents responsibility. When we grow older and matured, we became independent, and the responsibility of taking our welfare no longer falls on to the shoulder of our parents, but ourselves. As we grow older, so does our parents . Hence it is our responsibility to take care of them when they grow older.

biggdog523, what is your question? It is about grammer mistakes or asking opinions on how to further improve this essays?
OP biggdog523 1 / 2  
Feb 12, 2012   #3
sorry i totally forgot, i wanted some help on improving the essay
EF_Susan - / 2,365 12  
Feb 16, 2012   #4
The responsibility felt by a person grows with their independence. P ersonal care and descion making all impact ones responsiblity and independence.

The ability to care for yourself is a result of personal independence.

In fact ,---Two words.--- when I was young my mother had always told me to zip up and put a jacket on before I went outside, because my mother had the responsibility of caring for me.

Futhermore, he has the job of managing a schedule, and he may pick work over a family visit.

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