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Brown essay; why drawn to the academic fields you indicated


sportybluei 7 / 40  
Dec 22, 2009   #1
Please tear up this essay, thank you :)

Why are you drawn to the academic fields you indicated in the Anticipated Degree and Academic Interest questions above? (limit: 1000 characters)

Ms. Lim called the twenty-six letters she wrote on the blackboard, the "English Alphabet." They looked strangely beautiful to the third grader's eyes. Six years later, those eyes sparkled with curiosity again, when they saw a poster of neatly written Hiragana, or the Japanese Alphabet, on the classroom wall. However, both times were only beginnings to the long journey that would still continue today.

Learning English and Japanese on top of my mother tongue, Korean, introduced me to the immeasurable depth of every language in encompassing culture and history. But as I delve further into these languages, I am even more fascinated by their universal nature of being able to communicate human emotions and thoughts through literature. I hope studying comparative literature and translation in college will bring me closer to understanding the human race, across time periods, languages, and national boundaries.
pbhat 5 / 16  
Dec 22, 2009   #2
This is a beautifully written essay! In fact, you grabbed me from the first sentence.

They looked strangely beautiful to the third grader's eyes.

You should change "the third grader's eyes" to "my third grade eyes." I think it makes the statement more powerful and personal.

Learning English and Japanese on top of my mother tongue, Korean, introduced me to the immeasurable depth of every language in encompassing culture and history.

"Every" is an extraneous word. You ought to delete it

Other than that good job and good luck...I'm sure you'll get in to Brown
srandhawa 10 / 157  
Dec 22, 2009   #3
obviously this is a very hard essay to do w/ 1000 characters(by the way im applying to brown also, are you sure its 1000 characters). I dont like the last sentence in the first para, the beginning to a long journey, too cliche esque and since you cant really elaborate on it in such a short space, i dont think you really need that sentence. What i think you should focus more of your attention on(relatively speaking for a 1000 character essay) is your idea of communicating human emotions through literature, that is the thing that jumped out the most at me when i read this essay, and that something unique and ties to your opening sentence. That also a perfect direct answer to the question, so it allows you to focus much of your space on this. Good luck,


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