my burning passion to learn - Primary Goal for as a student Essay for VCU

As you start your college career, what is your primary goal as a student and how have you prepared to meet this goal, how do you plan to succeed, how do you feel you will do at VCU?

Throughout my career at West Potomac High School I have had many experiences that have changed my perspective as a student and scholar. I am fortunate for these experiences as they have generated habits that have benefitted me greatly. During those years, I have accepted the challenge of taking Honors courses that will prepare for the years ahead. Understanding and completing my school work has become my number one priority and I've balanced that work with after school activities through careful time management. While my senior year continues, I am striving to maintain and improve those habits while developing new routines.

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i realized i went over the 250 word limit. Here is the revised essay

Throughout my career at West Potomac High School I have had many experiences that have changed my perspective as a student and scholar. I am fortunate for these experiences as they have generated habits that have benefited me greatly. During those years, I have accepted the challenge of taking Honors courses that serve as a template for the years ahead. Understanding and completing my school work has become my number one priority and I've balanced that work with after school activities through careful time management. As my college career comes to a start, my primary goal as a student is to stay ahead of my work and continue to execute the important task of time management. I understand that my collegiate ambitions depend on my productivity and I have confidence that managing my time wisely and making school my priority will lead to success. Over the past year I have been researching colleges that could be the potential fit for me and after conducting the search, I discovered that Virginia Commonwealth University. I believe that I am a great match for Virginia Commonwealth University because its highly rated Pre-Nursing and BSN programs attract my desire to achieve success in the medical field and coupled with my love for art and graphic design, VCU provides remarkable compatibility. The urban setting, diversity of the school, and amazing basketball culture add on the luxuries I am salivating over. With my burning passion to learn I believe VCU is tailored best for me.

I suggest you take a more personal route with this essay. The way you wrote it just seems very boring and factual, like you're writing about someone else and not about yourself. Also, the way you talk about honors courses makes it sound like anyone could have wrote it.