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Business entrepreneurship - Turkey burslari scholarship essay application 2026



Kpro123 1 / 1  
Feb 12, 2026   #1
Hello dear scholarship committee i am intrigued in applying for the turkey burslari scholarship 2026 and i need an (urgent feedback) for my essay since there is 8 days left for the portal to close thank you very much.

As long as I can remember, I have always felt extremely fascinated by business entrepreneurship, partially business administration, along with everything that comes with it. Also, I always wanted to be engaged in business, driven by my deep passion for the field. When I found out that fluency in English is a crucial skill, I was already a confident speaker, since my cousins and I communicated in English regularly. However, I believe there is always room for improvement. That is when my school organized a trip to London, the UK, and we were enrolled in an English program in Middlesex University called English Path. The program mainly focused on our vocabulary and communication skills, which was very helpful, so my English level significantly improved. It was the best international experience I had, being mixed with international students. I learned about new opportunities, people, and cultures. Each student was assigned a presentation on a specific topic. Mine was about J.K. Rowling, the author of the Harry Potter series. When the time came to present what we worked on, I successfully stood out among other students because of how well I explained J.K. Rowling's background and how she managed to become one of the best. Our there is out there. That's how my presentation ranked the first place and I got rewarded an official certificate from Middlesex University for completing the English path program. That was how I gained one of the most important skills needed in the business industry. After the trip was over, I figured since it was still summer break, I wanted to get my first job in a business to be familiar with it. And it was perfect timing because my father's friend offered me a job at a currency exchange office because they needed an English speaker since they were having trouble communicating with foreign customers. Hence, my father's friend had heard about my trip to the UK for the English program, and I accepted his offer and started working as a currency exchange clerk. Working in a business was a valuable experience. I communicated with people, helped them, and solved problems. And even if it wasn't the exact type of business I desired, yet it showed me a glimpse of my future goals and taught me core principles of the business industry.

Turkey welcomes international students with open arms and provides the best environments along with top-tier education quality and try to make students feel at home. Turkey is one of the most well-known countries for entrepreneurship with a large number of self-made entrepreneurs that have made the business industries thrive over the years.hense As a future entrepreneur studying business administration in a reputable university and country like Turkey is the next step to achieving my goal.

After completing my program i plan to help improve society as much as possible by solving problems that people struggle with i am not exactly sure what i will do but i definitely know that it will revolve around Entrepreneurship and business.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 16060  
Feb 13, 2026   #2
While the reviewer will appreciate the conversational tone of your essay, it does not share the focus between your language preparation and your early business interest and development / foundation. As a seasoned reviewer, I was looking for a proper information development that would have given a short but informative language development paragraph and a proper work training paragraph in relation to the work that you did with your father's friend.

Your essay will be helped if you explain a vision for a business that you hope to run or start in the future. Remember that Turkey is well known for supporting start up businesses so it is never too early to start networking in that field since you hope to become a major business player in your home country.

There is a need for you to smooth out the choppy paragraphs in this essay. Do that alongside correcting the grammatical errors in the essay that tends to disprove your claim of being fluent in the English language because of your proficiency that was developed by speaking to your cousins in English.
OP Kpro123 1 / 1  
Feb 13, 2026   #3
@Holt
Thank you so much for your time
You took the time to review my essay and i appreciate it
But is it possible for you to he more specific about what i can improve in my essay and what to add or anything or tell me which ones are the choppy paragraphs?
And i understand some of your points but if you could be more specific i would really appreciate it thank you again. Please contact us at essayforum.com@gmail.com for private service!


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