Haha better late then never, a couple words too long but I hope 212 is acceptable.
Topic: What is your intended major? Discuss how your interest in the field developed and describe any experience you have had in the field - such as volunteer work, internships and employment, participation in student organizations and activities - and what you have gained from your involvement. *
Only a select few students are lucky enough to have an instilled passion and desire for a certain field of study. The rest settle for what is available, or learn to be passionate about something they do not enjoy. After much consideration, I am certain that business is what lights my fire. In today's interactive economy, the most powerful tool is knowledge and the ability to obtain it, harness it, apply it, and in turn reap all of the extraordinary benefits. With every business class I take, my thirst for more knowledge grows. Finance, accounting, business law, economics, communications, ethics all interest me. I have been employed by a stock brokerage, an international bank, several small businesses and a law firm. Gaining invaluable experience and knowledge, I have used every job as a tool to prepare myself for the future. Proactive networking has opened promising doors, which I would never have dreamt accessible at such an early age. I have learned countless lessons about today's business environment but can confidently say that I have only scratched the surface. The most valuable lesson I have learned is that opportunity is endless and the only limitation to what you can accomplish in the business environment today is the inner desire you possess.
Hello, again--
Very well-stated! You say exactly what you need to about your accomplishments and desires, and you say it with enthusiasm and clarity. I see only one thing to mention:
"Finance, accounting, business law, economics, communications, ethics all interest me."
I would either put "and" before "ethics" or use a long dash: " . . . communications, ethics--all interest me."
Other than that, I think it's good to go. Nice job!
Sarah, EssayForum.com
