use stronger english
I hope the teacher gave more instructions than this! Did s/he make any specific corrections? If so, please tell me about one of them.
My dad caught me with my boyfriend on the porch when I was 16. And just by writing this down I feel the same shame, pain, humiliation, and embarrassment, just as if it had happened yesterday.
Practice typing this sentence 10 times, and speak it aloud so that your brain remembers.
He never
thought (use a spell checker!) that I had boyfriend,but I had one.----- So what?! A lot of 16 year olds have a boyfriend or girlfriend. It is natural and normal for people to be attracted to each other.
When he is working ,i had my boyfriend coming over ,so we
can could spend time together, laugh, play, talk about our future, and so on.-----I added some commas.
My boyfriend showed up as
usual because of course we both knew my father's schedule.
We were sitting at the
porsh porch, kissing. Our eyes were closed, when a huge,big mad voice scared us,interrupt us, saying: "Oh, no, no, no, thats not my Natacha, God tell me I am dreaming. Not my only, lovely daughter, not the little girl that I have raised."
We both were shaking.We
din't didn't know what to say ,what to do.
It seemed a dream for me
especially .
I started to panick.I felt so
embarrassed .
My dad was right. "What the hell I was doing here?" I said .
Din't he tell me to wait until I was 26 before to start dating?What was wrong with me?"
Moreover, my dad's reaction became worse.
Capitalize the first word of each sentence:
Thus he pushed my boyfriend from his behind ,and he felt on a big roc, so that a big scar
appeared under his right eyes a
nd remained until now.
The
three of us were crying .My dad knew what he did was wrong.And arriving at the nursing station, the nurses were surprised t
o see that big whole was on Johny's face.
After all, we were celebrating our 8 year-old son's birthday.
Capitalize Johny, capitalize December.
I don't think anyone waits until age 26 to start dating. Anyway, I'm glad you all get along now. Practice each correction I made! Practice 10 times typing each correct sentence. Speak the sentence aloud, too, and you will remember the correct grammar.