What is your favorite word and why?
(roughly 250 words)
Challenge was once like the cane vine twining upon me, which only grew more and more when I tried to flee. Born Japanese-Chinese per se made me unusual among kids in the neighborhoods in Tokyo, Japan. At the age of six, I shifted from Japan to Tianjin, China and attended a local elementary school while I knew nothing about Chinese language and culture-a newfangled challenge again. Later, I experienced more transitions-Chinese school to Tianjin Japanese School, to Chinese middle school, and to Tianjin International School. The first few months in a completely new school was always tough for me, like a single-handed solider bursting into a foreign kingdom, attempting to establish his own world. I absentmindedly followed the challenges coming upon me with fear as well: barriers of language and cultures, rigorous curriculums and socialization issues- difficulty in making friends with students who already had their own bonds for many years. However, soon I started to realize that the transitions indeed equipped me with superior flexibility, and the diverse people I met and experiences I had garnered for me a unique perspective.
Now, with so many challenges I confronted, I am facing a new tremendous challenge again-the pursuit of economics in college. With my growing fascination in academic areas, especially economics and math, and the drastic transformation of China I witnessed, I aspire to analyze the past economic trends and make insightful predictions for the future global economy.
Challenge, once fearful and something to avoid, has grown into a learning experience that I appreciate and seek.
"Later, I experienced more transitions-Chinese school to Tianjin Japanese School, to Chinese middle school, and to Tianjin International School. " This sentence is lengthy or wordy( I guess), but I 'm sure you should condense it.
"barriers of language and cultures, rigorous curriculums and socialization issues" For the word cultures ,do you mean cultural differences?
I really, REALLY like your writing style and how you organized your essay.
However, soon I started to realize that the transitions indeed equipped me with superior flexibility, and the diverse people I met and experiences I had garnered for me a unique perspective.
This is really the only time when you express WHY challenge is your favorite word before dwelling into your current upcoming challenge of going to college. Have another sentence of two of why you liked challenge in your childhood and you will be golden.
Good Luck! Give some feedback on mine! :)
