Hello, it will me much appreciated if any of you can give me feedback on my response. :)
Before I start, under the essay question section of the application, do all my answers gave to be formatted in essay format? If yes, does that mean I have to split my response below into paragraphs?
Tell us why you want to study at the Schulich School of Business. (250 words)
I have chosen the Bachelor of Business Administration program at York's Schulich School of Business in order to pursue my goal of becoming a Chartered Accountant. Growing up in a family full of accountants, I was hesitant in following the same footsteps until I started co-op at a small accounting firm. I realise that I enjoy the use of logic, numbers, and the constant engagement with people. Also, accounting is a solid building block for future pursuits in any industries by opening doors to ventures that I may undertake. By attending the Schulich School of Business, I can achieve my goal, while still having the flexibility of ten specializations in the case that my career aspirations changes. Moreover, Schulich's diverse faculty of student leaders creates an unparalleled opportunity of growth. Accompanying this with Schulich's word class reputation of business excellence, it will help develop my skills to unprecedented heights. Like a priceless pot of gold at the end of a rainbow, Schulich's four year BBA program offers its own pot of gold filled with knowledge through its rich resource of students and teachers.