*First of all, it seems kind of amateur-ish to start off the essay with questions.
not just because I had a bad day.
not because of the sinfully delicious chocolate.
because I was able to understand myself.
because, because,because. unless it's meant to be poetic, idt this repetition is helping.
Good premise.
I enjoy the metaphor with the cave and fireflies. sums up the essay nicely!
GL!
**please edit my Stanford essay! :)