Ok, if you are going to serve this as your main dish, then there are some things you got to take note:
A daughter who always misses Mom and Dad when she was six years old in boarding school and at the time she lives in Beijing alone for four months while they are in Italy, to which a hemisphere to cross;
I think the above doesn't really say much on you.
And what's the difference between
A young lady
and
A 17-year-old girl
? Consider changing the young lady to an activists in human or civil rights
Your list started with the "
what you have done" and progressed to your
"personal qualities" like being optimistic, skeptical... I think this a bit rough. And here comes my opinion on the montage.
Focus on like ten things you have done "like being a teacher, volunteer, writer, leader..."; expand a bit on them by incorporating the
personal qualities that you want to bring across; restrict each to about fifty words so you doesn't exceed the word count.
For example: Merge a photographer with an idealist and talked about how you insisted in taking hundreds of shots just to get the perfect one. Then you will end up with ten roles and ten qualities. At least, this will help to compensate a bit for the lack in depth.