Thank you guys im appreciated to all given advice!!!!i'm from Chinaand this is my UC transfer essay.Don't know if it sounds good or bad.What is your intended major? Discuss how your interest in the subject developed and describe any experience you have had in the field - such as volunteer work, internships and employment, participation in student organizations and activities - and what you have gained from your involvement.
I have dreamt about myself in a black suit and high heels standing in front of an international business conference, talking about a new market plan confidently. Since I started selling my drawings to earn extra money in second grade, I knew that my little career had led my interest on the way to business field. However, deciding a major is always a tough consideration. When I was younger, I never knew what a business meant. I asked my mom and she replied, "business is a way people do trade and social network." I did not understand until I joined ASSE exchange program when I was 16.
In the summer camp, students came from all over the world. We were asked to get into different groups and develop a market plan for pizza fundraiser. It was my first time doing fundraising and I started searching information online about how to prepare it. We designed posters, solicited everyone for help, calculated funds and rented a cart to pass out our flyers. It was arduous work, but our group won1st place. I enjoyed the successful excitement this little business plan has brought to me. During the course of this activity, I empathized what a basic business is like and how to create a market plan.
Furthermore, the most important thing I learned is if I want to persist in business field, a exceedingly well-developed network and strong interpersonal skills are very necessary. I am lucky enough to say I am an insightful person and love to share my culture in the process of learning from other cultures. I noticed once you have a comprehensive perspective, communicating with people from different cultures will be much easier. I think this is an important concept that I learned from all the business-like activities in my exchange year. Now with what I have learned, I am confident enough to handle the upcoming bowling fundraising held by the Phi Theta Kappa Honor Society acting as the secretary.
To pursue farther in gaining business strategies, I interned at the China Comfort Travel Agency as an assistant of the Customer Service Department, as well as a member of the Taiwan Market Plan team last summer. I experienced the real-life situations and did learn a lot from it. I found myself picking up the phone and answering questions more confidently; and I grasped how important teamwork is when developing a market plan by sharing different ideas and listening to those with more experience. Now when I look back, I finally understand why years ago my mom told me about business-it is not only about money and trade, it includes communication art, diligence, creativities, comprehensive understanding, social networking and generously repaying society.
My aspiration now is clear-to pursue international business, build symbiotic bond between China and the USA and share Chinese culture with the world. I will help people who need help in societies and especially give helpful hand to kids who want to be exchange student-that may shape their dreams by showing their a whole new world, just like me. Now I am questioning myself, "Am I afraid of the risk in business?" I smile, pulling out a pen and a piece of paper and start drawing like the old days. "Art for pennies? That, I will do."
Thanks for all advice that will be given and i really appreciate it!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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