Essay prompt: Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.
===I wrote this essay for Yale supplement and I know it's crude and unrefined. I hope to receive any suggestion possible. Thanks in advance!!
Last summer, I was chosen as a volunteer of the 1st Chinese Bridge Chinese Proficiency Competition For Foreign High School Students to accompany and guide the Russian delegate. It was not just a 10-day competition. It was a time for the entire world to observe and experience the power of diversity.
Contestants from all over the world demonstrated their fluency in Chinese language, their comprehensive knowledge of the Chinese history and tradition, and their cordial love of the Chinese culture. My Russian friends successfully acted out the play Journey To the West, one of the four greatest works in Chinese literature; the U.S contestants combined traditional Chinese allegro with hip-hop in their performance; Contestants from Singapore wrote Chinese songs of their own; and the Malian contestants did their traditional dance with Chinese music. When I asked one of the English contestants about their attitude toward Chinese culture, he replied zealously: "Oh well, we love it, and it is awesome when to share our experiences with you--------it's like talking with an interesting friend."
When my Russian friends were practicing their speech, they showed great desire to look more "Chinese". They asked me questions related to the tone and pauses of their speech and how to make a bow after they finished. I was impressed by their passion and love for the Chinese culture. Once I was frustrated because Li Bo, one of my Russian friends, cannot understand my words in Chinese. Then I tried to talk to him in English, which he is better at. But he requested me to be patient and tried as hard as he could to understand my words, and told me that only when he had conquered such problems, can he improve on his Chinese. I was deeply moved and became more devoted to my job as a teacher.
Just as this worldwide competition brought about great changes in our perception of cultural diversity, I believe a Chinese student like me can also make a difference in Yale University. As a passionate young man, I have always wanted to be a world peace ambassador. I feel shocked at the miserable situations in regions of war. The World should be a place where everybody lived harmoniously without conflicts. I want to travel around the world when I grow up to propagandize the ceasing of war. With my determination, I will help the poor and fight against evil, and make contributions to creating a better world. I want to join the big family of Yalies, experience the collegial, laid-back atmosphere. Right there, I shall take a step closer towards my dream.
Being a volunteer promoted my sense of responsibility; communicating with people from all over the world shaped my understanding of diversity; and all the challenges in my life pushed me to the hardest. I shall seek common ground for humanity while reserving the minor differences, and in the future, try my hardest unite the world as one.
===I wrote this essay for Yale supplement and I know it's crude and unrefined. I hope to receive any suggestion possible. Thanks in advance!!
Last summer, I was chosen as a volunteer of the 1st Chinese Bridge Chinese Proficiency Competition For Foreign High School Students to accompany and guide the Russian delegate. It was not just a 10-day competition. It was a time for the entire world to observe and experience the power of diversity.
Contestants from all over the world demonstrated their fluency in Chinese language, their comprehensive knowledge of the Chinese history and tradition, and their cordial love of the Chinese culture. My Russian friends successfully acted out the play Journey To the West, one of the four greatest works in Chinese literature; the U.S contestants combined traditional Chinese allegro with hip-hop in their performance; Contestants from Singapore wrote Chinese songs of their own; and the Malian contestants did their traditional dance with Chinese music. When I asked one of the English contestants about their attitude toward Chinese culture, he replied zealously: "Oh well, we love it, and it is awesome when to share our experiences with you--------it's like talking with an interesting friend."
When my Russian friends were practicing their speech, they showed great desire to look more "Chinese". They asked me questions related to the tone and pauses of their speech and how to make a bow after they finished. I was impressed by their passion and love for the Chinese culture. Once I was frustrated because Li Bo, one of my Russian friends, cannot understand my words in Chinese. Then I tried to talk to him in English, which he is better at. But he requested me to be patient and tried as hard as he could to understand my words, and told me that only when he had conquered such problems, can he improve on his Chinese. I was deeply moved and became more devoted to my job as a teacher.
Just as this worldwide competition brought about great changes in our perception of cultural diversity, I believe a Chinese student like me can also make a difference in Yale University. As a passionate young man, I have always wanted to be a world peace ambassador. I feel shocked at the miserable situations in regions of war. The World should be a place where everybody lived harmoniously without conflicts. I want to travel around the world when I grow up to propagandize the ceasing of war. With my determination, I will help the poor and fight against evil, and make contributions to creating a better world. I want to join the big family of Yalies, experience the collegial, laid-back atmosphere. Right there, I shall take a step closer towards my dream.
Being a volunteer promoted my sense of responsibility; communicating with people from all over the world shaped my understanding of diversity; and all the challenges in my life pushed me to the hardest. I shall seek common ground for humanity while reserving the minor differences, and in the future, try my hardest unite the world as one.
