rules which
add a comma in between
best-sellers cannot tell. And
the period is unnecessary, try a comma
between religion and education is amazing to me.
amazing doesn't sound right. try "caught my eye"?
there is not a concept of the conflicts
huh? um try "there aren't conflicts"?
building the church and improving society world-wide
isn't the church already there, if not then ignore this. "improving the church and society world-wide"
world-wide, the massive international opportunities and the best campus food in the USA, Wheaton is the place where I really want to be in my coming unforgettable years.
way too wordy. um try "world-wide, I know Wheaton , a college known for its opportunities and outstanding food, is where I need to be"
read mind :D