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City of divers cultures/Anesthesiologist;NYU Supp;Campus of choice/Academic interests


Jojolocomoco 2 / 4  
Dec 28, 2012   #1
1.Tell us why you have chosen the above campus (using a maximum of 700 characters-spaces and punctuation included).

Response: New York City is a city filled with diversity. From experience, I know that it is a city filled with many different cultures and people from different walks of life. From Little Italy to China Town, the city's unique cultural flare will make me feel right at home. Along with diversity, the Big Apple provides many things to do and sights to see, the possibilities are endless. Boarding on the New York Campus will give me many opportunities to venture into the city and explore something new each night, boredom does not exist. The prime location of the New York campus will enable me to fully encounter the whole city while also being surrounded by different cultures and ethnicities.

2.NYU's global network provides students with hundreds of academic areas of interest for students to cultivate their intellectual curiosity and to help achieve their career goals. Whether you are entirely undecided about your academic plans or you have a definitive program of study in mind, what are your own academic interests? Feel free to share any thoughts on any particular programs or how you might explore those interests at NYU on any of our campuses.

Response: My eyes open as I slowly regain consciousness. How long did it take? What medicine was used? How strong was my dosage? These were some of the first questions that popped into mind. Unusual Yes, but I was immensely fascinated with the doctor who anesthetized me for my tonsil surgery. While recovering, I researched doctors involved in the pre surgical process and I came across what would soon be my newly found career, an anesthesiologist. That tonsil surgery propelled me to pursue a career as an anesthesiologist. The monumental tasks that they perform are very intriguing. I believe that New York University will provide me with the proper tools and resources needed to successfully reach my goal of becoming an anesthesiologist such as the fine open-laboratories in the Department of Biology or highly cited scholars in the Department of History. I plan on taking advantage of these resources and allowing them to aid me in my analytical research and interpreting processes. The journey to becoming an anesthesiologist will be a rigorous one but New York University will positively challenge me. Here, I would take pre-med courses while majoring in History. Diving into pre-med courses, the main course that I will take is biology. Having an extensive background of biology experience, I have learned a few life lessons from my studies. My senior year AP Biology course required my lab partners and I to create a DNA double helix structure out of recycled materials. My group successfully made ours out of skittles, marshmallows, licorice, and skewers. This essential experience set the framework for my studies at New York University. In this experience we used simple items such as candy to create a complex structure. I will apply this to my studies at New York University by using simple ideas of biology or history to solve complex problems that may exist in everyday life.

(Please help me condense response #2 to only 1,500 characters, right now I'm at 1,909.)

Any suggestions, errors, concerns or anything is greatly needed! NYU is my top choice so I would like these to be as perfect as possible thanks!
Felicia1995 2 / 2  
Dec 28, 2012   #2
You can probably remove the sentence "That tonsil surgery propelled me to pursue a career as an anesthesiologist" because it's a little redundant. You can also probably remove "of becoming an anesthesiologist" from the sentence "...needed to successfully reach my goal..." because it's already clear what your goal is. You can probably also remove "The journey to becoming an anesthesiologist will be a rigorous one but New York University will positively challenge me." And then instead of starting the next sentence with "Here" you could start with "At NYU."

This should cut your essay down a few characters!


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