First, remember punctuation at the end of every sentence.
Second, do you mean "stooped," or did you mean "stopped?"
Third, I suggest you run the piece through a spell checking program such as Word or the Mozilla web browser (free at mozilla.com).
Make sure you are only capitalizing proper nouns and the first words of sentences; this includes words enclosed in quotation marks.
Avoid using abbreviations such as "etc." in formal academic writing. Write out all of the items in your series instead.
Make sure your punctuation is enclosed inside the quotation marks when you are using them, never outside of them "after the fact."
I hope these suggestions help you get started; now go back through and carefully look for these instances. Your essay will be much stronger once you have.