Hello. I'll help with word choice and grammar for a few parts of your essay._________________________________
Going to college should be something I love.
This is a bit awkward. You have two choices for how to correct it:I love the idea of going to college.Going to college should be something one wants to do._____________________________
This means a total freedom. Free from parents guidance 24/7, living on my own, got to decide what to do and not to do, also have a full control of myself.
The second "sentence" is not a complete sentence. Let's try combining them to make the whole thing sound better:This means
a total freedom
.:Freefreedom from parents
' guidance
24/7 ,
freedom to liveliving on my own,
freedom togot to decide what to do and not to do
.,In college, you are fully in charge of yourselfalso have a full control of myself .
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Honestly, I was truly excited back then. Until I realize how hard are the TOEFL and SAT tests and I started to doubt myself.
Let's re-combine these two thoughts to improve the flow:Honestly, I was truly excited
about all of these aspects of college lifeback then. Until- until I realize
d how hard
are the TOEFL and SAT tests
would be;thenand I
then started to doubt myself.
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Can I actually survive there?
CanI thought to myself, could I actually survive there?
"Survive" is very dramatic. What about this?:I thought to myself, could I really thrive there?_______________________________
All the worries started to crept to my mind and scare me to death.
All the worries started to
creptcreep intoto my mind and scare me
to death .
"To death" is too serious and intense in my opinion, so I'm taking it out of your sentence.____________________________________
The first thing that came to my mind when it comes to expectations is, survive. Having fun is number two.
My first priority T
he first thing that came to my mind when it comes to expectations is,was to survive. Having fun
is number two.was less important."Survive" is a very dramatic word and may give the impression that you are not emotionally mature enough for college. How about saying it this way?:My first priority was to work hard, pass the exams, and succeed in college; I decided that having fun was less important.______________________________________
I hope that has helped you some :)