My family and I come from the country of Nepal, we moved to United States in March 2006.
Use a semicolon here instead of a comma, in between Napal and we. Otherwise, you have a comma splice.
I have always enjoyed the field of science and coming to USA has helped find my future aspiration, to become a scientist in the field of astrophysics.
I have always enjoyed the field of science
, and coming to USA has helped
me find my future aspiration
:
I am a person who has lived majority of my life outside of the United States and belong to a minority group but I am also a person who holds diverse perspective on many matters, and those perspectives are not necessarily influenced by my background.
to become a scientist in the field of astrophysics.
I am a person who has lived majority of my life outside of the United States
, and
I belong to a minority group
, but I am also a person who holds diverse perspective
s on many matters, and those perspectives are not necessarily influenced by my background.
You answered the question well, and I liked how you included your diversity. You have an eloquent voice, but just had some logistical errors with grammar. Good luck :) I hope you can help me with some of my essays.