College Rap on "Perseverance " for UVA, Lemme know what you think?

the question what is your favorite word and why
I responded

Rap on "Perseverance "

I never give up, never back down,
Never move an inch when I'm standing my ground;
Perseverance, ya ll already know what it is,
it's how I get mine and he don't get his;
This words my favorite,
Its number one,
Tells a bit about me an how I get things done;
Work my hardest,
Try my best,
Just to be a level above the rest;
Dedication, determination, devotion, and grit,
All synonyms of how I don't quit;

Never will I quit,
At least not soon,
Not till I've got a few houses on the moon,
Lamborghinis on Pluto, Maserati's on Mars,
I'll be sporting Gucci like the rest of the stars.

Perseverance,
my way of saying I'll never stop,
Why would I stop with my sight on the top?
U of V will get me there, I will pass, you will drop,
Call me graduated, On the stage, watch me talk.
Giving alum speeches, talking of my reaches
Saying how I was the starter hidden in the bleachers,
All I had to do was try, I already had the features,
You can do it to, an believe me you need ta
Send an app up to Charlottesville, To the U of VA

This is definitely unique, and i could feel the beat in it as i read it. The bottom paragraph was the only part where I struggled getting the beat. But other than that it was fun and made me laugh...in a good way :D

Good Luck!

Thank you, I'm glad that I'm not the only one who liked it.
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Lol I absolutely loved the second paragraph. I really did find it unique and I think it will catch the Admission officers' eyes

Hope you get in and if you have the time I would be eternally grateful if you can look over my essay:

"Not till I've got a few houses on the moon,
Lamborghinis on Pluto, Maserati's on Mars, "

^ That's absolutely hilarious and shows that you not only have a good sense of humor, but that that you can use that humor cleverly. Plural of Maserati is simply "Maseratis", get rid of the apostrophe.

Overall, I really like. If I were an admissions rep I would let you in just because you made me laugh. And trust me, when you read hundreds of applications a day that is REALLY important.

Good! Worth a reading

Very nice! I could really feel the flow, and the structure ties to a rhythm very nicely.

It's a little materialist to me, and the expressed idea of alum speeches before even getting in turned me off, but I think that's more a difference of philosophy... how I get mine, how he don't get his... know what I mean?

I like the concept though. The reviewers will find it entertaining and unique for sure!

Have you seen other raps going in for applications before?