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When I was young, I always watched my mother oil-paint. All the colors on the canvas hypnotized me: I had to try it. Swirling the different colors on the palette and applying it to the canvas, I found myself freely expressing my emotions. Since then, oil-painting not only became my passion; it became my therapeutic elixir. Just like the people who write in their diaries, I record my life on an oil-painted masterpieceïfilling it thickly with rich colors and feelings. Dark slabs when I'm sad; bright strokes when I'm happy. Although the color strikes in dissension initially, it slowly harmonizes after layers of paint. Through the years, I've noticed how closely related oil-painting is to the real world. The canvas is the world; the colors, the discordance in life. Just like how I blend the colors on my canvas, I hope I'll be able to harmonize the society someday.