ifteen year old Craig,and ten year old Karl, and me
Due to marital problems, my mother had just left my father and started a journey with her three children, one that would take her from a small physical therapy office in Queens to a booming practice of her own.
You can take the start of the journey back further, starting in Mumbai?but they too were too young to do everything and they first had to take care of themselves. Though I had to find my own ways to entertain myself and to take care of mycomplete schoolwork, but I was able to succeed because I had my mother has ais an exceptional role model role model.
Because of my upbringing, I am a lot more independent and hardworking than I probably could have been hadif I been brought up any other way, and I know the true value of a dollar.This last part seems irrelevant..
I also had to take care of my schoolwork on my own and did not have the luxury of having my mother check my homework every night, as teachers often recommended parents do.
I emulated my mother and tried to work as hard as possible so I could be like her
Seeing my mother struggle to save money taught me to be careful with money, and I saved my five dollar a month allowance religiously and got a job as soon as I was allowed to in high school.Though this is a good example, because it seems a little disconnected, I would just take it out.
This essay will surely show this school exactly how your upbringing has CONTRIBUTED positively to how you are today.
Awesome job, hope my small suggestions on flow and phrasing helped.
Check out my responses if you have time please : ) they are both under 200 words.