This is my second choice of common app essay. I don't know whether it is an impressive essay. Welcome for critics~
I am very deeply grateful for my grandma that she exerts me a subtle influence on my sensitivity to Chinese Calligraphy. I think it is the important part of my moral life. I have learned to make special studies of calligraphy since I was three. At that age, I showed an interest in writing Chinese Characters, even though I didn't really know what the meaning of the word was or what it would bring about in my future. My routine activities change a lot because of the chlligraphy, it has brought me more infinite joy for life. I have an innate gift for the art of Calligraphy. With the help of my talent and diligence, I have reached many achievements in my academic life especially when I entered the senior high school. I have benefited from this sensitivity of Chinese Calligraphy, because it not only assists me achieve my goals, but makes me understand the ancent Chinese culture as well. For example, the four of the Regulor Scripts, Zhenqing Yan, Gongquan Liu,Ouyang Xun and Mengye Zhao are of my favorite Calligraphists. When I practice the copies of their calligraphy, I seemingly believe that I could feel their works of calligraphy are still living. That originates from my understanding of their works, because calligraphy would make one more sensitive to the moral life. However, my principle for practice the Chinese Calligraphy is that not only I would try to imitate others but also to create the new style of my own. I deepen my comprehension of their works and the calligraphists, and I make the calligraphy by heart.
Although the road leading to success is not easy, my optimism and diligence will lead the way for me like a guiding star. No matter what difficulties may I encounter in the future, I will never give up hopes to be optimistic. I will be firm and indomitable in pursuit of the development of my studies at your college rather than complaining about unfair results, I smile in the face of the predicament because I am fully convinced that optimism can help me find a way to solve any difficulties.
This is the first choice.
Your grammar needs work, but we'll worry about that later. At the moment, you state twice that calligraphy is an important part of your moral life, but you don't explain that at all. It isn't self-evident. I think you would have a very interesting essay if you did explain the connection, but until you do, the essay feels unfinished.
