Music is my life.
cliche!
Writing and listening to it
gives writing and listening
give...
While I was growing up in my mom's belly, my father used to place the stereo close to her. ---- this is nothing unusual or particularly interesting/impressive.
keep the verb tenses the same:
I always
had wondered if that
was the reason why I
liked music so much.
or
I
always often wonder if that's the reason why I like music so much.
I wanted to be a professional singer but hearing myself sing in the shower quickly changed my mind. ------ cool, that is getting interesting.
Music makes my day.------ ahh! Why write this here?
It can change my moods, emotions and thoughts in a snap. --- same is true of everyone.
When I'm sad it makes me happy, if I'm distracted it helps me focus. ---- run on sentence!
I think that without music my little platonic world wouldn't exist. ?????
Even
though I might never be a recording artist, if there is music in my life, there is one more reason to keep me going. ------- what?!! why would you even consider not being a recording artist? Why are you not one already? Audacity is free. audacity.sourceforge.net/
Start this over. Consider this one a warm up exercise. Definitely dont tel the reader you might never be a recording artist, oh my word... Tell the reader things that show your unbreakable resolve.
check out this 4 min 20 sec piece for inspiration: youtube.com/watch?v=KxxuSiC4wNw
Writing is music, too! So... decide what effect you want to have on the reader and choose words that brig them to a deep state of mind.
:-)