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Common App-The Encounters with Tax Injustice During My Business Registration


lzhd1028 4 / 11  
Dec 9, 2011   #1
Topic: Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.
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"Congratulations! You are the first teenager in our city to be permitted to establish a company!" When I heard such a compliment from the Enterprise Registration Officer, it was as if I saw before me a golden path towards becoming an entrepreneur.

However, the local tax examiners, who discriminated against my mushroom trading company because of its small operation scale and little tax revenue, decided to collect taxes by their own simple calculation procedures. After careful estimation, I found out that I would have to pay twice as much my gross profits in taxes. At that moment, I felt thunderstruck and my brain went blank. Over and over again I pleaded to pay taxes according to the tax laws just like other companies do, but was bluntly refused.

Caught in this dilemma, I discussed solutions with others. My uncle advised me to send gifts to these tax examiners to persuade them into collecting taxes in accordance with laws, whereas some internet friends hinted that under-reporting revenue was the best way to deal with unjust taxation. Nonetheless, my modern citizenship urged me to reject these fraudulent acts, earning me my father's approval. As I faced the reality of tax injustice, my only choice was to give up this trading company.

However, at this moment, the underprivileged farmers' expectant looks when I agreed to distribute their mushrooms still floated in my head; the Trust-Mart manager's promise that I could supply mushrooms to his mall still echoed in my ears. Also, my entrepreneurial dream was as resolute as my determination to reach the summit of a mountain. Therefore, I avoided the mode of selling products, and started to carefully search for a new approach.

As I reflected on the relationships I had already formed with the mushroom farmers and the supermarket manager, the inspiration of becoming a business agent flashed through my head. After analyzing the cases of successful business agencies, I eventually decided to establish a business information company and provide a service creating supply and demand relationships between producers and sellers, with commission as my company revenue. This business model could also be feasible in the market.

With a hopeful heart, I reconfirmed the tax provisions with the examiners, yet was informed that the corporate tax would still be collected in their own simple methods, which would undoubtedly lead to a heavy tax burden. Never had I realized that tax injustice would be like a dark cloud hanging over small companies. Fortunately, in this scenario at least, my business could retain a little profit.

I therefore re-filed my application to the ten government departments. When I finally received my business license, I suddenly realized that I had already stepped into the adult world and learned to analyze and solve problems in a more mature manner. I was no longer just a student with great ambitions, but also a beginner in the business world who would need to face challenges at any time and struggle for self-reliance.

More importantly, the repeated encounters with tax injustice inspired my strong pursuit for social justice and fairness. Thus, I changed my career plan of focusing solely on running a business; instead, I would like to actively participate in work that would promote social justice. I believe that the force from the majority of the people would definitely push the wheel of social progress forward.

No matter how rugged the road ahead is, I will always forge ahead without hesitation.

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I know that my essay might sound a little bit too formal due to the nature of the content---business registration. But do you think that, after reading this essay, you can get a sense of what exactly happened and how did it impact me?

BTW, kindly point out any grammar mistake or unidiomatic usages of English (I'm an ESL learner).

Your help is much appreciated!!!!
admission2012 - / 477 90  
Dec 9, 2011   #2
Hello,

I think your essay is great in terms of it's content. The topic of individual and business taxation is a hot button topic at the moment in the United States. Aside from your grammatical (flow, word selection) mistakes, I would suggest that you elaborate more on how the actual simple tax rate was calculated. Was your company singled out by the examiners, or was this a version of an alternation minimum tax leveled on business that is more common than not?

Lastly, you also argue that your excessive tax burden fueled your desire to study social justice. Remember, social justice is more-so about the individual and not a corporation or business. There are many who believe that taxing businesses at high rates or using an alternative minimum tax (AMT) is a from of social justice. Party because it attempts to capture revenue from corporations which might otherwise remove all tax liability through clever accounting methods. This revenue is then used to support social programs. Hope this helps admissions advice online.
OP lzhd1028 4 / 11  
Dec 9, 2011   #3
Thanks for your reply! It explains a lot!

However, I think I forgot to mention that I am an international student from China, so I am actually talking about a situation in my country, not the United States. In my country, small businesses are especially discriminated against by the Taxation Bureau not for any legal reasons.

Instead, when it comes to small business, the tax examiners don't bother to follow the complex procedures to collect taxes as required by laws. They may think that their time and efforts are not worthwhile because small business tend to pay a small amount of taxes; therefore, to simplify their work, they follow their own simple calculation procedures even though such an action is against the laws.

Anyway, this is a real and widespread situation in China, which is why there are many small businesses engage in bribery or under-reporting company revenue so as to avoid unnecessary taxes.
OP lzhd1028 4 / 11  
Dec 9, 2011   #4
Can anyone help with my grammar?

I will comment on yours if you help with my essay. THanks
maroon5 9 / 57  
Dec 9, 2011   #5
Your Grammar's okay by the looks of it...i think u should stick to your story whether it be controversial or not...

I pleaded to pay taxes according to the tax laws just like other companies do---you should begin with " i pleaded with them to allow me to pay taxes...."

Nonetheless, my modern citizenship urged---replace modern citizenship with " moral principles" or " ethical values" or something similar

Other than that i don't see any more errors...you have a unique story and i enjoyed reading about how u weathered adversity and managed to pull through...GOOD JOB AND GOOD LUCK

Please Look Over MY Amherst Supplement
OP lzhd1028 4 / 11  
Dec 11, 2011   #6
Any more input anyone??? The deadline's very near and i would really appreciate ant advice...I could look over your essays too...


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