but deep down, I could never choose one color over another
I can never choose
In politics. I don't see in black and white
"...politics, i dont see..."
its a really good essay! i enjoyed it, specialyl because i do the same with shampoos...and perfumes, my god i cant avoid spending hours in a perfume shops..
but i think there is room for a bit more structure. i think the politics part is a bit random and takes the readers mind off your 'sniff' topic. what u try to say is about humans never ending journey to find the absolute, and how it can not be found when you have so many variables. if u are hesitant to keep the politics part, then u should change the essay from being about smells and stuff, and more towards 'in-absoluteness' , but i dont think u want to do that.
also u should say where u want to go with your interest in smells. its fine if u dont have any plans; u dont have to have any. but i think it would be good to leave the reader with an future looking view of what your interest may develop into, otherwise it doesnt complete the requirements of a personal statement.
Good job! and good luck, i loved the essay
could u take a look at my personal statement? i havent really made up my mind whether i will submit it as my personal statement or not, can u help me with that? is it good enough material?