IT skills on more academic fields.
what is IT
Since then it was thesaurus, online school newspaper & essays shop that I have developed.
I'm confused
scholar extracurricular activities.
phrasing is strange
However, expected or not, my
take out expected or not
ironically they went skyrocket up having in mind the time I spend "learning".
i get the irony.. but what do you mean by that latter part
Seems like while collecting database for thesaurus, my Lithuanian language dictionary expanded colossally and while writing articles for newspaper and reviewing essays for mistakes I learned more and more vivid information then ever which helped me latter, during the test works.
run-on? I don't get the whole picture here. why are you writing about all these things? For draft 1, make sure tense is consistent. also, make sure you focus on one part...IT? what is that, what did you do with it, what did you learn? etc
draft 2...I'm lost. sorry, I dont see the point of saying...this was something I did that meant a lot. maybe rephrase? I'm confused...seriously
Ok...So I'm guessing you're either ESL...or I'm just not getting what you're going at. The idea in the third draft is somewhat there...but I don't get an overall epiphany.. what did you do? make art pictures using a compass? program things on a computer to draw circles? pray tell. I'll try helping you with a solid idea. but i need the idea and the points first.
EDIT* Ah. I see..content.
about your first one, make sure you lay out what you want to talk about, then describe what that activity was (briefly if it is obvious), then elaborate on what you learned, how it affected you, maybe why it is important to you...maybe same for the other ones.